Wednesday, 19 November 2014

Black Narcissus

1 comment:

  1. Hi Josh,

    You have made some pertinent observations here :) Try and keep your tone academic sounding though... 'a bunch of sexually frustrated nuns', for example, sounds a bit chatty; a group of nuns sounds more formal.
    Also, try and introduce your quotes, rather than just plonking them in - an easy way to do this is by using the author's name, so for example,

    'Michael Mirasol notes that, “Even the absence of color and use of shadows serves a purpose that would make any horror movie lover proud, once Sister Clodagh and Sister Ruth have their final face-off.” (Mirasol, 2010)